Bruh, you killed off the protagonist! He was supposed to come back and see if the pit turned into a tree.
A nice turn I must say. For a timed writing exercise, this is really awesome!! The scenery was so vivid and the personfocation of the mountain, the way the streams grew, all so splendid!
I must say, you a knack for writing fiction. You construct a good world; it lures you in.
Excited to read more! Maybe you should try short stories that are a little longer. It would give you space to build a stronger/longer plot as well.
thanks! I definitely do wanna write some longer short stories, it's just so hard to actually come up with a plot when you're trying to think of one lol.
Here are a couple of longer stories I wrote, there a bit older though so my writings definitely not the same as it is now.
This was extremely beautiful. Very ethereal, very poetic. Everything is told with extreme minimalism which is actually really powerful. I could taste the date in my mouth as I was reading.
This is such a beautiful and unique piece of writing!
I was so engrossed in the story that I could see myself stranded on that rock, waiting for the rain to relent.
You definitely should venture into fiction and fantasy too. Mashallah you have the knack of picking just the right words and drawing a reader in!
Looking forward to read more of your work!❤️
thank you so much!
Bruh, you killed off the protagonist! He was supposed to come back and see if the pit turned into a tree.
A nice turn I must say. For a timed writing exercise, this is really awesome!! The scenery was so vivid and the personfocation of the mountain, the way the streams grew, all so splendid!
I must say, you a knack for writing fiction. You construct a good world; it lures you in.
Excited to read more! Maybe you should try short stories that are a little longer. It would give you space to build a stronger/longer plot as well.
thanks! I definitely do wanna write some longer short stories, it's just so hard to actually come up with a plot when you're trying to think of one lol.
Here are a couple of longer stories I wrote, there a bit older though so my writings definitely not the same as it is now.
https://open.substack.com/pub/inkblotwriting/p/time-enough?r=4at1ty&utm_campaign=post&utm_medium=web
this one is part 1/2
https://inkblotwriting.substack.com/p/under-the-cities-shadow-part-12?r=4at1ty
Love this, every small detail is important. Beautifully written!
glad you liked it!
This was extremely beautiful. Very ethereal, very poetic. Everything is told with extreme minimalism which is actually really powerful. I could taste the date in my mouth as I was reading.
thank you!
Has the feel of a parable with a gentle lesson on patience - when the stone moves and the water flows into the valley.